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Thursday, January 29, 2009

Helen - in memoriam



so you think,
one death will move me
and take away all my remembrance
?


my ears, even now, ache with metaphors
and ceremonies


do you still need an elegy?


Helen,
I have seen God in your eyes
when enemy ships decimated Troy


as I shielded you with my open arms


and I have scoured the sky for centuries
without a last trace.......


I never looked for you
in ice-buried museums


your skin still smells of holy wars......


and yet,
you talk of all the mirrors in the city


if you want to recreate memories,
then let all love end tonight!


a star sinks from the night sky
with a wounded apology...........


I wonder if any stars
are ever missed


do you still crawl along the busy crosslanes
and let your eyes cast virtual images?


touch me, for once, with your buttery eyes
and etch in me, your cold reflection


anoint my body with wax,
and reveal to me those ancient secrets
of love-making


beneath a canopy of whispers.........


can words ever recreate that silence?


let's explore ill-written poems
and repeat the jazz on Nero's flute


let's hide behind metropolitan lies
and cinematic fancies -


prepare the table for a last supper,
stack your pills with funeral songs.......


and let us, together, evoke the unborn prophet
from your next wedding -


as Troy goes up in flames.........


Note : (Though the allusion is made to the mythical Helen of Troy, she is, on a dual level, the 'snow girl' from my previous poem)

33 comments:

sujaan said...

this is more understandable for me than the last poem...i really liked the lines, I wonder if any stars
are ever missed, and can words ever recreate that silence...
really nice, keep blogging

floreta said...

very nice, deeptesh!

here is my favorite line:
let's explore ill-written poems
and repeat the jazz on Nero's flute

anastasia... said...

great goin. keep writin

Rye.. said...

etch in me, your cold reflection

That'sa great line.. Keep smiling.. Hope to read more from you...

Deeptesh said...

My response

@ Rye

That's my favourite line as well

@ floreta

Thanks for following my blog.

@ anatasia & sujaan

Thank you very much

"Sunshine" said...

Hey Deeptesh,

I actually did try reading your poem yesterday, but all I got was the first three lines. The rest of it came up in some kind of code. Anyway, I was able to decipher it line by line today. It's really beautiful. You do a great job of making references to Classical works--and your words are like music.

sourik_poetsparadise said...

I liked this poem very much...but at some portions i think you wrote certain lines which were not that required...the poem could have made a more lasting impact in the mind of the reader had it been a little more specific...
Anyways...the superb ending is really praiseworthy and even the metaphors and imageries...
the line 'a star sinks from the night sky with a wounded apology'...yeah...i liked it a lot :)
please take care that your poems don't get monotonous in the long run...that's just an advice...
But, you are a very good poet with excellent creative thoughts and ideas in your mind...so,keep writing!!! :):)

I would be waiting for your next creation...

Wishing you best of luck!!!

Sourik :) :)

Debs said...

I did find some recurring imageries from other poems I have read and done.

Nice one, any way. Reminds me of my Odyssey classes.

Marja said...

Now I am finally here to comment
and I can't read it accept for the first three lines. The rest are cicles and stars etc

Sorry if you had to go through a loss Memories is all hat we are left with

Deeptesh said...

My response

@ Sunshine

Thanks.I don't know about the codes.Must have been some connection problem.

@ Sourik

Yeah I focus on my endings a lot.It will be good if u mention which lines are redundant and why.Everyone's a learner.

@ Debs

Thanks.U didn't mention the names of the poems u were alluding to.

@ Marja

Yeah thanks.Was there any problem with the lines?A few others were also telling.I can't figure it out.Could have been a problem with the font.

Errant Gosling said...

Wonderful poetry. I'd love to know more about the woman of whom you write.

Deeptesh said...

Deeptesh

@ Chase

Thanks mate!

@ Errant

That's a question I have to face everyday!Thanks anyway.And I'm happy that you have started following my blog.

utopianfragments said...

i am very happy you showed up at my place and ask me to visit.
wonderful poem.
thank you

deepteshpoetry said...

@ utopianfragments

No probs.Thanks mate!

seher's shenanigans said...

great now i will have to de code it on word!
why wing dings?

seher's shenanigans said...

:( all the same!

i decoded it on word!

and got the whole gist

I wonder if any stars
are ever missed......... yes there are ... on a completely blank night!

deepteshpoetry said...

@ seher's shenanigans

It had deeper implications.Can the mind or memories for that matter ever be completly blank?

Tazeen said...

do you take all your pictures yourself

SweetTalkingGuy said...

I love the way you weave the contemporary with the historical,
I enjoyed reading this and 'Reminisences'.

Thanks for visiting STG...

Bluestocking said...

Hello Deeptesh!

I enjoyed your poem. I liked the Helen of Troy allusions. Greek mythology is a favorite.

Thanks for inviting me to your site. I'll add you to my google reader to keep up with your poetry.

Deeptesh said...

@ Tazeen

Actually the photos have been taken by my dad.Photography is his passion.

@ SweetTalkingGuy

Yeah,it was an experiment to weave the present with the myth to provide a setting for the poem.I'm happy that you liked the concept.

@ Bluestocking

Thanks a lot.

Sriram said...

sweet lovely poems.. Thanx for droppin by my blog.. Also find time to visit my another blog http://starbozz.wordpress.com and leave your views.

Winnie the poohi said...

Very nicely written

Inam said...

Well, the fonts are in a bit of trouble actually, you have used "webdings" probably. The poem is very rich in terms of imagery. However, a slight chiseling here and there could render it even more beautiful. The delicate air of romance is very admirable!

deepteshpoetry said...

@ Racquer

I knew u r gonna visit my site one of these days.Anyway,I'm happy you finally did.

@ Winnie the poohi and Sriram

Thanks a lot

@ Inamda

I've changed the font now.Thanks a lot for your comment on both of my poems and for mentioning the point on 'surreal urgency'

Tumblewords: said...

An ephemeral piece - it moves in and out of time and space to create a memory that may...may not...last. Excellent.

sourik_poetsparadise said...

hey do chk out my new poem ' The Evening '.

Sourik

Deeptesh said...

@ Tumblewords

I loved your comments...especially as it goes down very deep.It was an idea to create the feeling of consciousness of time as universal...where there's no past,present or future....

@ Sourik

I definitely will.

Pongy Papaya said...

can't decipher the text beyond the first three lines :-( its all stars & sickles..

Deeptesh said...

Yeah people have been complaining of it.Any helpful suggestions 2 fix the problem is most welcome.I tried changing the fonts as well.

Rye.. said...
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Rye.. said...

Naa, delete korte aami besh bhalo koreyi jani :)
I'll mail you. let me look for ur id now.